Tuesday, November 07, 2006

The End Of Jig Saw


Three weeks ago something horrible happened to my friends and me. A man in a mask, someone I never heard of. He tortured people to death. He goes by the name Jig Saw


It all started when Charlie, Sean, Brittany, Toniann, and I were walking down Time Square, in New York. It was pretty cold out when we saw and add for free movies at
Muvico.
“Come on guys lets go see a free movie.” Said Toniann.
“I don’t know it sounds dangerous.” Charlie said as if he was scared.
“I think it would be fun,” I said.
So we all go to the movie theater thinking that it’s going to be fun, until we get there.


The place was disserted, there was no one in sight for miles.
“Come on what are you guys waiting for” Sean asked. “You sure it’s safe to go in there?
“Brittany asked like she was worry. “Yes I am positive; now let’s go “Sean said.”
When they go in all the doors shut, and locks go on the door. Then the lights went out and we heard a strange laugh “ha ha ha ha ha ha .” Then on the big screen in theater 13 we saw a strange man with a clown mask on. He started laughing again. Then all the lights went out and I heard it four more times. I yelled “GUYS! You their?” know one answered. All of a sudden I got hit in the head.


I woke up on a red chair. I was tied down with the rest of my friends. “How do we get out of here?” Sean asked like he was going to throw up. Then on the big screen the man came on again. He said, “My name is Jig saw. Your task is to find the cure to your sickness. You’re probably thinking you don’t have one. But you do now, I poisoned you and your cure is somewhere in this theater. You better hurry up you have until 6 O’clock. Oh yeah there’s traps everywhere in this place so I would be careful if I were you. GOOD LUCK!”


“He said we have until 6 O’clock and its only noon, so we have sometime.” Charlie said. “Ok, so we should split up and find the cure,” I said. ”I’ll go with you then and you three can go with each other” Brittany said. Brittan and I go to the left while Charlie, Toniann, and Sean went to the right. “Let’s go in this room” Toniann said. “It’s locked” Charlie said. “See if anyone is in the room first threw the eye piece” Toniann said. Sean puts his eye in the hole and something shoots out in his eye. BANG! “Oh my God, what are we going to do?” After Sean got killed the door opened and the door opened with a box in front of it which said “cure”. “You want to get it?” Charlie asked.
“Yeah, I want to live” Toniann yelled.

Toniann put her hand in to see if anything would happen, but nothing happened. So she put her head in and stood up so her whole body was in the box. Then, WAM! Thin sharp blades came out of the sides and chopped her head and arms off. There was blood everywhere in the box. “AHHH! Help! Help! Kevin! Brittany! Anyone!” Charlie screamed at the top of his lunges.


“What was that?” I asked. “I think it was Charlie we should go look for him,” Britt said. “We should take this just in case.” She picks up a gun off the ground. Then we both run as fast as we could to find Charlie. Then we stopped in a hurry because we heard something. It was coming fast and loud. When it came around the corner Brittany got scared and pointed the gun at the person and shoots him, it was Charlie. “O no! I shoot Charlie!” Britt said. “I no, but we should keep moving and find that cure.”


While their looking for the cure they looked at their watch and it was 5:00.” Hurry up we only have an hour,” I said. Ha ha ha ha ha Jig Saw laughed. We followed his laugh. “Come on it’s coming from around the corner.” Britt said. We walked into the room and saw Jig Saw is sitting there in a chair with two cures in his hands. “SHOOT HIM!!!!” I shouted. Brittany shots him right in the head.


We took the cures and drank them. Right after we drank it the turned to 6:00. “Wow! We just made it,” I said. “I know, I wonder who this is, Britt said. “ Lets
Find out.” I took the mask off and it was the face of my dad. I wondered why he would try to kill my friends and me. “We should get out of here and call the police to get him out of here.” Brittany said.


A day later I got a phone call from the police saying that no one was there, but three dead kids. “That’s impossible, I saw the bullet in his head,” I said. “Sorry kids no one is here” the cop said. I guess that the legend of Jig Saw is still out there.

8 comments:

AVC said...

coulda been alittle more of your story not saw

grd said...

It actually kinda scared me, and i liked how you used people in our class, that way i could faces onto the characters.

csw said...

i really like the part when i scream like a little girl,other then that i think you should haev made it a little more your own rather tehn saws

A.M.P said...

It was good, but you switched point of views. like one part you would say 'I....' or you would say 'kevin....' so that through me off a bit. but other wise, i liked it.

p.s
I like the part were charlie dies, haha jk.

cmm said...
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cmm said...

your story was interesting,and i enjoyed reading it... btw i love how you put me in your story =( thanks ill remember that! well it was good..keep it up!!!!!

cmm=]

ChristinaL said...

As I mentioned to you, I appreciate that you have created your own spin on something, but the idea and character belongs to someone else. Even the premise of someone have a time limit to save themselves is very "SAW," and not your own.

STS said...

i thought it was a good story, and had a good story line.