The Haunted House
It is Halloween night and I am walking around my neighbor hood with two of my friends. I am dressed up as Pocahontas and my friend, Jessica that was walking to the right of me, is dressed up as Madonna. To the left of me is my other friend, Kristen who is dress up as a dead soccer player.
We are going house to house trick or treating and then when we are walking down my block we see a haunted house. The house always looked weird form the outside but this Halloween the people who lived there decorated it as a haunted house. So, my friends and I decided that we wanted to go into the haunted house. So we enter the haunted house we see other people running out screaming so I know this was going to be a scary haunted house.
We walk into the living room of the haunted house and we see five people dressed up as dead people. They started to stare at us and it was really freaking me out. Then all of a sudden they start walking toward us. My friends, and thought it was just a haunted house and it wasn’t really real so we just played along like we are scared and staring running away into the kitchen of the house.
When we get into the kitchen we see more people dressed up as dead people but they looked more real then the people in the living room and these people had knives in there hands and they had fake blood on them but I started to freak out because I was wondering if they were really trying to kill us but then I just said to my self that it couldn’t be true and it was just a haunted house and people were trying to scare us. So, my friends, and I just run into the next room ignoring the people with knives in their hands, in the kitchen.
The next room that we entered is a dinning room. There was a big chandler hanging over the dining room table. On the dining room table was plated and silverware but the food on the plates wasn’t normal food that you would eat. Actually it didn’t look like it was eatable. The was a cow head in the middle of the table with blood all over it and on the plates was spaghetti but instead of meatballs there was fake eyeballs and they looked real but I knew they couldn’t be real. Then all of a sudden I hear the door slam behind me. The people from the kitchen came storming in with the knives still in their hands. Now it was getting really spooky. My friends and I run out of the dining room and back into the kitchen. The people started to chase us still running with the knives in there hands. I thought to myself we have to get out of here.
My friends and I run for the door to the living room but then more people dressed as dead people came through the door in the living room. This time the people had knives in their hands. My friends and I are wondering how we are going to get out of this house. Then my friend Kristen took a frying pan from the kitchen counter and hit one of the person’s head and knocked them out. Then one of the people came behind me and was ready to cut me with the knife in there hand but then all of a sudden I hear a loud bang and I realized that my other friend Jessica had hit hit the person across the head with frying pan. I joined my friends and picked up a cooking pot. I hit someone across the head and knocked them out cold. Then my friend Kristen hit another person across the head and they fell to the floor. Then my friend Jessica hit someone else across the head but they didn’t get knocked out. They were three people left and the were still trying to cut us with there bloody knives. My friend Jessica finally knocked out the person she had hit across the head before. Then I knocked out another person across the head and there nose started to bleed and then fell to the floor. Now there was one person left. My friends and I hit the person across the head at the same time and they fell to the floor right away.
My friends and I entered the living room there was other people that were running out of the house screaming. Some of them had cuts on there arms and were bleeding. Even some of there noses were bleeding. Me and my friends headed for the front door and got out safely. I was so glad that I got out of the haunted house alive and I knew I didn’t want to go to another haunted house again. My friends and I ran home and told our parents what happened and they called the cops and they said that we should stay home for the rest of the night. So, my friends and I went to sleep in our sleeping bags on the floor in my room.
The End
Tuesday, November 07, 2006
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5 comments:
i liked the setting but there wasnt enough detail as to where they were
I think there is a good idea to the story, but there were some grammar misatkes that made the story kinda of confusing.
still not as much detail
I am a little concerned about the change in tense throughout the story. Sometimes (as in the beginning) you are in the present and then as time goes on you move to past tense.
I think this may be confusing for your readers.
I agree with ms.Lambard. It dose change from present to past. and also could use a little more detail and grammar mistakes should be fixed.
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